55 Fiction: Betrayal

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Their eyes met in the darkened club. She knew she should not. It was unlike her to have a one night stand. But maybe, maybe it could be something more. She did have his number. “After cousin Chrissy’s wedding” she thought. Their eyes met again. This time though, he was at the altar with Chrissy.

(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (13 October 2009)

This is my first attempt at 55 Fiction so constructive criticism is more than welcome. I don’t even know if I’m doing this right but I’m giving it a go anyway.

19 thoughts on “55 Fiction: Betrayal

  1. Sanch, the writer says:

    @ TearsnDreams: Thanks!

    @ Guria: Thanks!

    @ Titaxy: Not that creative?! You write brilliant poems woman! It will take time for an idea though…I can’t think of anything else at hte moment 😛

    @ Solilo: Thank you, thank you! 😀

    @ Legal Alien: Lol! I had to first write it on Word to check if I stuck to the word limit. It is hard esp given that we like to write and write and write…

    @ Soin: I guess it’s a common theme, eh?

  2. Psych Babbler says:

    @ TearsnDreams: Thanks!

    @ Guria: Thanks!

    @ Titaxy: Not that creative?! You write brilliant poems woman! It will take time for an idea though…I can’t think of anything else at hte moment 😛

    @ Solilo: Thank you, thank you! 😀

    @ Legal Alien: Lol! I had to first write it on Word to check if I stuck to the word limit. It is hard esp given that we like to write and write and write…

    @ Soin: I guess it’s a common theme, eh?

  3. Sanch, the writer says:

    @ Matt: Thanks! 🙂

    @ G: Thanks re the banner and the story. So you liked the twist, eh? Thought it might actually be predictable… 😛

    @ Archana: Thank you, thank you…all thanks to my baby sis. That’s what I was looking for all this time — something to make my blog unique. And thanks re the 55fiction too 🙂

    @ Shankar: Thanks!

  4. Archana says:

    Oooh love the new look of the blog! 🙂 It’s so original! I’d seen the other layout before here and there, but this one just makes your blog uniquely yours. Very nice. 🙂

    As for the 55, nicely done! Life is totally full of surprises, of who, what, when, where. You just never realize how small this world is until situations like that come up.

  5. Psych Babbler says:

    @ Matt: Thanks! 🙂

    @ G: Thanks re the banner and the story. So you liked the twist, eh? Thought it might actually be predictable… 😛

    @ Archana: Thank you, thank you…all thanks to my baby sis. That’s what I was looking for all this time — something to make my blog unique. And thanks re the 55fiction too 🙂

    @ Shankar: Thanks!

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