Final Moments

Lying on my deathbed
Looking back at life
Feeling the wind on my skin
Chilling the frail bones inside
If I could wind back the clocks
Is there anything I would change?
Experiences from childhood or adolescence
That I thought caused so much damage?
Those periods of anxiety
The awkward teenage phase
If I could somehow change those
Would I be able to save face?
The perceived harsh parenting
The introverted lifestyle
Had those not been there
Could I view life with a smile?
Life has had its ups and downs
Moments both glad and bad
Times I’ve wanted to end it all
And events that have made me mad
But all in all I can’t complain
I think my life was pretty swell
I had good family and good friends
I lived my life well
All the events in my life
Made me the person I am today
Lying on my deathbed
Happy to peacefully pass away
This has been written for One Single Impression Prompt 173: Wind
Until next time,
Cheers!!!ο»Ώ

31 Comments

  1. Prats

    June 21, 2011 at 5:15 am

    Beautifully written. Abs loved it.

  2. Marinela

    June 21, 2011 at 5:43 am

    Woww!!
    Sooo Beautiful Fantastic Write Up!
    http://marinelareka.com/

  3. Psych Babbler

    June 21, 2011 at 5:47 am

    Welcome here Marinela! And thanks for the lovely comment… πŸ™‚

  4. Prajakta Pradhan

    June 21, 2011 at 6:22 am

    Very beautiful. Simple, poignant. It’s what each one of us feels when we are in a rather sombre mood, looking inward and backward. Seriously nice.

  5. Psych Babbler

    June 21, 2011 at 6:40 am

    Thanks Prajakta…I truly believe that all we have experienced in life —
    the good and the bad — make us what we are. If we were to go back in time
    and change the negatives, we probably wouldn’t be the people we currently
    are… πŸ™‚

  6. The Lover

    June 21, 2011 at 6:53 am

    Beautiful. I want to die like that, without regrets.

  7. Kim

    June 21, 2011 at 1:39 pm

    All the events in my lifeMade me the person I am today…This is the ultimate truth.

  8. Titaxy

    June 21, 2011 at 3:08 pm

    deep thoughts, nicely written πŸ™‚

  9. Bikram

    June 21, 2011 at 3:49 pm

    Beautiful I would want that .. when i die I want ot die in a second .. pffffuttttttttttttt gone …

    Bikram’s

  10. reyah

    June 21, 2011 at 6:34 pm

    I love what the poem is pointing. This is for people who have fear in leaving.

  11. Comfy

    June 21, 2011 at 10:30 pm

    So simple and so beautiful

  12. Write Girl

    June 22, 2011 at 1:31 am

    Heavy words and very deep. Nicely written. P.S. I like your header on your blog. It’s cute!

  13. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 2:31 am

    IT sure is…we pick up certain traits and behaviours based on our experiences… πŸ™‚

  14. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 2:31 am

    Oh yeah…for sure! No suffering…nothing! πŸ™‚

  15. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 2:31 am

    Welcome here Reyah! Glad you enjoyed the poem… πŸ™‚

  16. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 2:32 am

    Thanks Write Girl! πŸ™‚ And thanks re the header too…credit goes to my sister who created it! πŸ™‚

  17. Raindrop

    June 22, 2011 at 5:35 am

    Lovely poem! Also appreciate that you penned it entirely on a cue- wind. I would find that difficult.

  18. Srinidhi Raghavan

    June 22, 2011 at 5:37 am

    I really like this. So beautiful. The flow is smooth andΒ refreshing. just like the wind. πŸ™‚

    Thanks for the notice about one single impression as well πŸ™‚

  19. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 6:18 am

    Thanks Raindrop! Funny thing is when given prompts or cues, I find it easier nowadays to use it and come up with a poem… πŸ™‚

  20. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 6:19 am

    Thanks Srinidhi for the lovely comment! πŸ™‚ And do checkout OSI…their prompts are quite good… πŸ™‚

  21. Amity

    June 22, 2011 at 6:36 am

    Oh where has my comment gone?

    I was tellin this is such a beautiful poem…and made me unwind the life I have lived for the past 44 years…but I still have many miles to go before I sleep!

  22. Psych Babbler

    June 22, 2011 at 7:36 am

    Disqus can be funny sometimes…don’t know where the comment went! Thanks re the lovely comment about the poem… πŸ™‚

  23. plindeman

    June 22, 2011 at 12:36 pm

    Nicely written- I think you captured the thoughts of many – not only in the final moments but on a daily basis.Β  Well done!

  24. Ramesh Sood

    June 22, 2011 at 4:57 pm

    Good to find you on OSI… Liked your poem and the way it is written..yes we all yearn for such a passing whenever it happens.. good thing is that we are living alive to everything that happens around us..Β  I invite you to visit my page.. and wish I had been earlier here earlier .. shall be following you from here on.. thanks..

  25. Psych Babbler

    June 23, 2011 at 8:20 am

    Thanks Plindeman…and yes, they are definitely thoughts we should have on a daily basis…content with who we are…

  26. Psych Babbler

    June 23, 2011 at 8:22 am

    Welcome here Ramesh! Thanks for the lovely comment about my blog…I do visit your blog but tend to be a lurker… πŸ™‚ Will attempt to delurk!

  27. Jingle

    June 24, 2011 at 8:43 am

    love it,

    a daring one, enjoyed the message.

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