Free

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 23; the twenty-third edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for this month is FREE.

For years I have longed for
Release from this relationship
Ever so far from you I’d go
Escaping your hurtful blows and whips
Fortunate I was, to
Run away some years ago
Even though you caught me later
Even though you punished me so
For I had seen what it was like
Remaining away from you
Enhanced by a taste for life
Existing by myself for that day or two
Flying away from this nest
Ruminating on what next to do
Engaging with that plan in mind
Enabled me to put up with you
Finally, the awaited day arrived
Rosy morning, a day so clear
Escape plan vivid in my mind, I
Entranced you into bed, my dear
Forever the image of you carved in my brain
Rasping for breath and stemming gushing blood in vain
Echoing sounds I’d uttered in pain, I
Ensured you’d never hurt me again
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Until next time,
Cheers!!!

42 Comments

  1. CRD

    August 15, 2011 at 6:10 am

    That was really creative 🙂 Though I couldn’t figure out whether the gal hurt herself or her tormentor.

    All the best for the Blog A Ton contest

    Here’s my entry

    Them
    Slaves

    Cheers
    CRD

  2. Psych Babbler

    August 15, 2011 at 7:49 am

    Welcome here CRD! It was meant to be a bit cryptic so you can interpret it any way you like…thanks for the wishes. Good luck to you too! Heading over to check yours out too…

  3. Someone is Special

    August 15, 2011 at 8:08 am

    Hope the hurt is never again.. Good luck for Blog-a-Ton. Free… are we?

    Someone is Special

  4. Aativas

    August 15, 2011 at 10:03 am

    What a way to become free! Only those who do not allow others their freedom would understand in time!!

  5. Psych Babbler

    August 15, 2011 at 10:52 am

    Welcome here SiS! Thanks for the comment and good luck to you too… 🙂

  6. Psych Babbler

    August 15, 2011 at 10:53 am

    Yep Aativas…the ultimate freedom. Hard to get but worth fighting for…

  7. Chintan

    August 15, 2011 at 5:00 pm

    I am here for the first time…really liked your blog 🙂 good lucks with the Blog-a-Ton 🙂

    http://chintangupta.blogspot.com

  8. The Fool

    August 15, 2011 at 5:38 pm

    That was a real well crafted poem. That was a story that had to be told as a poem and you used the  acrostic form really well. Best of luck for the Blog-a-ton.
    You can check out my post here
    In search of freedom

  9. Psych Babbler

    August 15, 2011 at 8:54 pm

    Welcome here Chintan! Thanks for the lovely comment! Will hop over to your space now.

  10. Psych Babbler

    August 15, 2011 at 8:55 pm

    Thanks TF for the lovely comment about my post. I’m still in the process of reading all the entries and will hop over to yours…

  11. Sunjoo Krishna

    August 16, 2011 at 1:07 am

    Well written poem. But if that coffee makes you think like this, I wonder what you are putting in it? 🙂

  12. Psych Babbler

    August 16, 2011 at 3:38 am

    Welcome here Sunjoo! Thanks for the comment! 🙂 and yes, I do have special ingredients in my coffee to help me think creatively 😉 😛

  13. Dimitri Das

    August 16, 2011 at 11:08 am

    I was blown away by this.

    A perfect 10 for the crazy concept and the creativity.

    Absolutely loved this.

  14. Psych Babbler

    August 16, 2011 at 11:31 am

    Welcome here Dimitri! Thanks for the lovely comment! Including the ‘crazy concept’ bit…made me laugh! 😀

  15. Shalmalee

    August 16, 2011 at 1:09 pm

    Awww…..so so so creative…Loved it! Acrostics are not easy 🙂
    best of luck for BAT…

  16. vineet singh

    August 16, 2011 at 4:22 pm

    loved your FREE creativity, indeed uniq…lovely

  17. Psych Babbler

    August 16, 2011 at 10:25 pm

    Welcome here Shalmalee! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂

  18. Psych Babbler

    August 16, 2011 at 10:26 pm

    Welcome here Vineet! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂

  19. sowmpu m

    August 17, 2011 at 3:07 pm

    free free free…very nice start with that free u finished the whole poem 🙂
    beautiful creativity 🙂
    all the best…
    keep smiling always 🙂
    sowmya

  20. rajthecritic

    August 17, 2011 at 4:24 pm

    some work u have put into it….nice flow of words ….loved it…..

    here is mine

    The search for eternal freedom – A Dragonfly’s curse  

  21. Psych Babbler

    August 17, 2011 at 9:48 pm

    Welcome here Sowmya! Thanks for the lovely comment about the poem. 🙂

  22. Psych Babbler

    August 17, 2011 at 10:28 pm

    Welcome here Raj! Yes, it took a bit of work compared to most poems I write. Thanks for the lovely comment!

  23. Brijender

    August 18, 2011 at 7:17 am

    Revenge to gain freedom? Seems almost like an oxymoron.
    Coz the more we dislike something, the less the chances that we will ever be able to free ourselves from it-true release would come only from indifference.

  24. Psych Babbler

    August 18, 2011 at 7:48 am

    I agree Brijender it is an oxymoron but in any case, someone who manages to escape a domestic violent relationship is never really free because of all the scars left over.

  25. Megha H

    August 18, 2011 at 6:20 pm

    nice poem…i like it 🙂

  26. Abhishek Sikdar

    August 18, 2011 at 7:09 pm

    Now THAT was interesting. I was thinking on the lines of sexual abuse when I got to the end.  I don’t think I’ve ever read anything that began in so serene a manner and managed to get me down somewhere cold. Amazing stuff.
    All the best for BAT.

  27. Abhishek Sikdar

    August 18, 2011 at 7:12 pm

    Now THAT was interesting. I don’t think I’ve ever read anything which began so serenely and ended in a way that made me visit a cold place. Sexual abuse is what it seemed to me. Amazing stuff. All the best for BAT.

  28. Abhishek Sikdar

    August 18, 2011 at 7:40 pm

    Amazing stuff. I have to say I’ve rarely read anything which changed my mood so suddenly and without my thinking. Sexual abuse?
    Amazing stuff.
    All the best for BAT.

  29. Psych Babbler

    August 18, 2011 at 11:06 pm

    Welcome here Megha! Thanks for the lovely comment…

  30. Psych Babbler

    August 18, 2011 at 11:07 pm

    Welcome here Abhishek! Thanks for the lovely comment…yes, I was thinking along the lines of someone being sexually abused but also physically abused…in a DV relationship. Thanks again! 🙂

  31. adayinlifeofmom

    August 18, 2011 at 11:53 pm

    your poem is interesting..the desire to escape from torture/abuse…ending left me speechless… I wish abuser was killed 

  32. Psych Babbler

    August 19, 2011 at 12:13 am

    Thanks Adayinlifeofmom! I left the ending vague to be interpreted in any way. It’s interesting you have taken it that the victim killed herself…some others have seen the abuser as being killed while one other person asked me who was actually killed. Deep down, I see it as the perpetrator being killed.

  33. Nidhi

    August 19, 2011 at 3:32 am

    loveeeeeeeeeeeeeed the poem and creativity
    FREE
    nidhi

  34. Vikram Pyati

    August 19, 2011 at 5:28 am

    Good one… reminded me of  Priyanka Chopra’s character in the hindi movie “Saath Khoon Maaf” !

  35. Psych Babbler

    August 19, 2011 at 7:54 am

    Thanks Nidhi! Welcome here…

  36. Psych Babbler

    August 19, 2011 at 8:22 am

    Welcome here Vikram. Thanks for the comment. Haven’t heard or seen the movie you are referring to

  37. Kalyan

    August 20, 2011 at 4:37 am

    lovely lines…beautifully crafted words!

  38. Psych Babbler

    August 20, 2011 at 4:44 am

    Welcome to this space Kalyan! Thanks for the lovely comment! 🙂

  39. Ketan

    August 20, 2011 at 10:35 am

    Did the girl murder some one…for becoming free

  40. Psych Babbler

    August 20, 2011 at 10:51 am

    Welcome here Ketan! She took a life…I left it a bit cryptic in that it could be her own or her long time abuser’s. Deep down though, I feel she killed her perpetrator as that was her only escape from the abuse.

  41. sowmpu m

    August 22, 2011 at 5:39 am

    thanks for voting me 
    :)keep smiling always take care 

  42. Psych Babbler

    August 22, 2011 at 11:29 am

    No worries Sowmya…I really enjoyed your poem…

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