Fiction

Cold-hearted

(c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

(c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

We sit next to each other as we always have for the last ten years. Staring at the television, watching but not really seeing. No words are needed.

I tried my best to make you love me. Cooked. Cleaned. Looked after you. I longed for warmth; you gave me coldness instead. I cried; you laughed. Your eyes said it all, cold with hatred. Your punches and kicks too.

Ten years of bruises. A decade of pain. Copious tears.

Today, however there’s a smile on my lips.

Your eyes are still cold but this time, there’s no life in them.

(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (1st July 2016) 

Word Count: 99. Written for Friday Fictioneers. It’s my very first time joining Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and other writers. You can check out other entries here

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21 Comments

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    Dahlia
    July 1, 2016 at 3:43 pm

    Well finally happily ever after – even if it is 10 years late 😉

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    Vinay Leo R.
    July 1, 2016 at 4:35 pm

    Yeah. The coldness is contagious. Even the warmest, most adjusting of hearts would turn cold at such treatment. Chilling write-up, Babby (no pun intended).
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    Mike
    July 1, 2016 at 8:08 pm

    O dear, she’s gone and done it, I wonder can she escape the consequences, but I do understand. Well written.

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    Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
    July 1, 2016 at 9:05 pm

    Dear Sanch,

    It’s my pleasure to welcome you to Friday Fictioneers. The use of cold eyes is very effective. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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      Sanch, the writer
      July 4, 2016 at 10:02 pm

      Thank you for the warm welcome Rochelle! And the lovely feedback 🙂

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    Geets
    July 1, 2016 at 10:12 pm

    That really is an impressive piece to read in such less words Sanch!

    Cheers

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    Shantala
    July 1, 2016 at 11:57 pm

    10 years too late, but in this case – better late than never. Yay freedom!
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    Angela
    July 2, 2016 at 3:53 am

    Excellent story, good for her!

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    seekeroftruthweb
    July 2, 2016 at 12:29 pm

    As Rochelle said below, welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Great story — I think my mom will cheer the narrator on!

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    Parul Thakur
    July 2, 2016 at 10:28 pm

    Well done. A revenge to make her smile. For all that she suffered, she needed that.
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    Corinne Rodrigues
    July 4, 2016 at 1:54 am

    All too true! Sadly the abuse reaches out from the grave, unless healing work is done.
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      Sanch, the writer
      July 4, 2016 at 9:52 pm

      Oh definitely agree with that…trauma continues through generations!

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    Heidi Busby Brown
    July 6, 2016 at 10:31 pm

    Fab take on the prompt! Loved it, fantastic last line giving you the twist and a moment of triumph! And love the title 😉 Heidi x

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