Cold-hearted

(c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
(c) Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

We sit next to each other as we always have for the last ten years. Staring at the television, watching but not really seeing. No words are needed.

I tried my best to make you love me. Cooked. Cleaned. Looked after you. I longed for warmth; you gave me coldness instead. I cried; you laughed. Your eyes said it all, cold with hatred. Your punches and kicks too.

Ten years of bruises. A decade of pain.Β Copious tears.

Today, however there’s a smile on my lips.

Your eyes are still cold but this time, there’s no life in them.

(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (1st July 2016)Β 

Word Count: 99. Written for Friday Fictioneers. It’s my very first time joining Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and other writers. You can check out other entries here.Β 

  1. Dahlia

    July 1, 2016 at 3:43 pm

    Well finally happily ever after – even if it is 10 years late πŸ˜‰

    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:03 pm

      Better late than never! πŸ˜€

  2. Vinay Leo R.

    July 1, 2016 at 4:35 pm

    Yeah. The coldness is contagious. Even the warmest, most adjusting of hearts would turn cold at such treatment. Chilling write-up, Babby (no pun intended).
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    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:04 pm

      Thanks Vinay…and great unintended pun! πŸ˜€

  3. Mike

    July 1, 2016 at 8:08 pm

    O dear, she’s gone and done it, I wonder can she escape the consequences, but I do understand. Well written.

    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:03 pm

      There may be a defense for that in court πŸ˜‰

  4. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

    July 1, 2016 at 9:05 pm

    Dear Sanch,

    It’s my pleasure to welcome you to Friday Fictioneers. The use of cold eyes is very effective. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:02 pm

      Thank you for the warm welcome Rochelle! And the lovely feedback πŸ™‚

  5. Geets

    July 1, 2016 at 10:12 pm

    That really is an impressive piece to read in such less words Sanch!

    Cheers

    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:02 pm

      Thank you Geets! πŸ™‚

  6. Shantala

    July 1, 2016 at 11:57 pm

    10 years too late, but in this case – better late than never. Yay freedom!
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    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 10:02 pm

      Haha…better late than never, right?

  7. Angela

    July 2, 2016 at 3:53 am

    Excellent story, good for her!

  8. seekeroftruthweb

    July 2, 2016 at 12:29 pm

    As Rochelle said below, welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Great story — I think my mom will cheer the narrator on!

  9. Parul Thakur

    July 2, 2016 at 10:28 pm

    Well done. A revenge to make her smile. For all that she suffered, she needed that.
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  10. Corinne Rodrigues

    July 4, 2016 at 1:54 am

    All too true! Sadly the abuse reaches out from the grave, unless healing work is done.
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    1. Sanch, the writer

      July 4, 2016 at 9:52 pm

      Oh definitely agree with that…trauma continues through generations!

  11. Heidi Busby Brown

    July 6, 2016 at 10:31 pm

    Fab take on the prompt! Loved it, fantastic last line giving you the twist and a moment of triumph! And love the title πŸ˜‰ Heidi x

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