#Rondel: Goodbye #atozchallenge

I say goodbye to you today
Hoping life will treat you well
On the sadness please don’t dwell
As forever, I walk away

Over the years, our lives went astray
And being together became hell
I say goodbye to you today
Hoping life will treat you well

I hope someday I can convey
At one time i was under your spell
I thought then, the future would be swell
But then our love did decay
I say goodbye to you today

(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (21 April 2017)

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A Rondel is a French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows: ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.

This has been written for the 2017 A to Z Challenge

14 Comments

  1. Bellybytes

    April 21, 2017 at 12:11 pm

    Another brilliant poem. Can feel the pathos. Hope you are enjoying your trek!

  2. Shalini

    April 21, 2017 at 12:46 pm

    What a gem!!! I am loving your poetic creativity Sanchi. Happy trekking girl!! Take care
    Ravanhatha-a unique musical instrument from Rajasthan
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  3. Kalpanaa

    April 21, 2017 at 1:42 pm

    That’s very sad. Beautiful rondel.

  4. Sreesha

    April 21, 2017 at 1:44 pm

    I feel like I’m sitting in a room, maybe with a lit fireplace, hugging my knees, reading this poem and just… I don’t know what to say, I loved it so much! I wish I could link it with the story I’m writing for my A to Z.

    1. Sanch, the writer

      April 21, 2017 at 11:29 pm

      Oh thanks so much for that…I love your writing so this is high praise indeed πŸ™‚

  5. Modern Gypsy

    April 21, 2017 at 2:49 pm

    You’re coming up with so many forms of poetry that I had never even heard about! The poem speaks so well of love lost, too.
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  6. Gail M Baugniet (@GailMBaugniet)

    April 21, 2017 at 5:41 pm

    Your poem is very expressive, a bit sad with its message of parting, but pragmatic in its choice of wording. I love learning new forms of poetry for me to try. Thank you for sharing this.

  7. Dipanwita Chakraborty

    April 21, 2017 at 7:46 pm

    I am short of words. The poem is simply beautiful. Lost love is always a topic close to my heart. Loved it

    1. Sanch, the writer

      April 21, 2017 at 11:29 pm

      Thank you for your lovely words Dipanwita πŸ™‚

  8. Kaddu

    April 21, 2017 at 11:11 pm

    Sad poem. At least they parted amicably.
    I didn’t get that about the caps. That capital B is not repeated anywhere? I’m confused.
    Enjoy your off! And come back and catch up with my blog okay! πŸ˜›
    Happy AtoZing!
    Chicky @ http://www.mysteriouskaddu.com

  9. Soumya

    April 21, 2017 at 11:13 pm

    I so love this! The words, the rhymes – all marries so beautifully.
    Maybe you should make a book out of this years A to Z. It will do really well.

    1. Sanch, the writer

      April 21, 2017 at 11:30 pm

      Thanks Soumya…it is something I am contemplating and might add some extra poems within some of the forms πŸ™‚

  10. Suzy

    April 22, 2017 at 8:07 pm

    Another interesting form and a very well written poem. A goodbye note written with so much emotion and grace.
    Suzy at Someday Somewhere – Respond Intelligently

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