The Fault in our Stares #Barathon

Watching the sway of your hips as you walk
Smiling as your skirt rides up your legs upstairs
Gazing at your breasts even when you talk
Picturing you in my bed without your wares
You seem convinced there’s a fault in our stares.
You know we’ve been trained to get what we want
What can you expect when your body you flaunt?

(c) Sanch V @ Sanch Writes (17 June 2017)

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This has been written as part of the Bar-A-Thon 2 Challenge prompt The Fault in our Stares. I have also managed to use the theme ‘Seven‘ by using the poetic form Rime Royal which is a seven-line stanza with the rhyme scheme a/b/a/b/b/c/c/

 

  1. Shantala

    June 17, 2017 at 5:16 am

    You are pretty awesome. That’s an unexpected take on the prompt, and you even managed to combine it with the theme. Nicely done. 🙂
    P.S. I tagged you in the Anything But Books Tag (my latest blog post). If and when you get the time, I would love to read your answers.
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  2. SHALINI

    June 17, 2017 at 12:51 pm

    WOWZA!!!! My undiminished Queen of Verse – you have spun another well thought of and provoking poem which fits like a glove on the theme so so well!! Kudos Sanchie

    1. Sanch, the writer

      June 17, 2017 at 1:55 pm

      Thank you lovely lady for your kind words 🙂

  3. Marquessa

    June 17, 2017 at 2:46 pm

    Visiting from the Barathon challenge. Enjoyed your take on the prompt and share on Twitter earlier. Cheers! Marquessa @simplymarquessa from Simply Marquessa
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  4. Akshata

    June 17, 2017 at 4:01 pm

    That’s a very powerful one conveyed in a few words. Look forward to reading more of your posts in #Barathon

  5. Zainab

    June 17, 2017 at 4:30 pm

    This is such a brainy one – and something different!

  6. Namratha

    June 17, 2017 at 5:35 pm

    Wonderful how you managed to combine the theme and prompt! Well written verse!
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  7. Mithila Menezes @fabulus1710

    June 17, 2017 at 7:31 pm

    I liked the inversion in the last line! And the way you incorporated the theme Seven into your poem. 🙂
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  8. Roshan

    June 18, 2017 at 12:20 am

    very well written… sadly, true also… every word of it.
    A flaw that just refuses to die even as generations pass… blaming the woman for the filth in the guy’s mind.
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  9. Geetika

    June 18, 2017 at 5:50 pm

    So there’s more form poetry we need to learn! The piece was flawless and the choice of words were excellent Sanch!
    Cheers

  10. Ranjini

    June 18, 2017 at 7:34 pm

    A combination of both the themes in such a way that it rhymes, on a really hot topic from an inverted angle. Mindblowing! Glad to have found so many talented writers via #BarAThon 🙂

  11. Parul Thakur

    June 18, 2017 at 8:20 pm

    That’s such a fabulous one, Sanch. Loved the take and the angle you chose.
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  12. Rajlakshmi

    June 18, 2017 at 8:54 pm

    brilliantly written Sanch… I am so impressed by your poetry and how you stick to the form. They are so difficult to write and you make it sound so effortless. A brilliant message as well.
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  13. Shilpa Garg

    June 20, 2017 at 2:34 pm

    That’s a powerful and a hard hitting one. Sad that a woman is blamed for everything even when the fault lies elsewhere!!
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