Poetry

Escape

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 10; the tenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

She looked around her house. All was perfect. Just the way she wanted.

Her husband slumped dead over his dinner.

She knew she would get acquitted. Battered-woman syndrome. Her ticket to freedom. Her ticket to escape his clutches.

With money.

It didn’t matter if it wasn’t true.

She wasn’t an award-winning actress for no reason.

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(c) Sanch Vee @ Sanch Writes (30 April 2010)

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63 Comments

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    Titaxy
    April 30, 2010 at 6:48 pm

    cruel. I loved it!!! 😀 Well written, PB!

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    Titaxy
    April 30, 2010 at 6:48 pm

    Was I first?

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    Sam Liu
    April 30, 2010 at 7:04 pm

    Wow…that was marvellous, brief, yet very powerful, I could see that woman as she she snook away into the night. Brilliant! 😀

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    comfortablynam
    April 30, 2010 at 11:17 pm

    Scary..but love it when you mix your two loves Psychology and writing to come up with stories..

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    Psych Babbler
    May 1, 2010 at 12:00 am

    Thanks T! =) Hehe…cruel…I like that!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 1, 2010 at 12:00 am

    And yes, you’re first! =D

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    Psych Babbler
    May 1, 2010 at 12:01 am

    Thanks Sam! You should give 55 Fiction a try…you write really well!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 1, 2010 at 12:01 am

    Thanks Comfy! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 1, 2010 at 12:02 am

    Just to add to that…I’ve been going for this creative writing class and I find that all the themes I come up with include psychology! I need to get a life beyond my work sometimes I think…but then I think that it’s an area I know quite well and maybe that’s why it pops up so often! =P

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    Saurabh Panshikar
    May 1, 2010 at 2:36 am

    great… I think this is the first 55-er in BAT.
    I love 55-ers coz they have immense imact at the end.
    And you did full justice to the above.

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    Gyanban
    May 1, 2010 at 3:01 am

    I would like to thank the academy, the producers the directors….ha ha
    good one..this one is sure for the Oscars…

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    ItsNu
    May 1, 2010 at 3:10 am

    what was that 🙂 LOL…it made me laugh !! Fantastic ‘escape’ !! Must say your creative writing classes are helping you 🙂

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    Magali
    May 1, 2010 at 3:42 am

    Wow that was really good. You are really good at 55 fiction, I think you should write more of it! 🙂

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    Comfortablynam
    May 1, 2010 at 4:15 am

    You know the area so well..so may want to move away from it in your writing..but since we (most of your readers) don’t know much about it..we love to read about it 😀 😀

    If you were to ask me..I would say please don’t stop.. 😀

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    Nethra_A
    May 1, 2010 at 6:14 am

    Good one. 🙂 So she was planning in real too, huh? 😮
    Anyway, all the best for blog-a-ton! 🙂

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    bluntedges
    May 1, 2010 at 6:52 am

    woman = evil personified! 😛

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    Leo
    May 1, 2010 at 7:01 am

    hi Psych Babbler.. first time to ur space and i liked it a lot! Yes, the escape was a bit cruel, but well written post. All the best for BATOM 🙂

    Escape

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    Sashindoubutsu
    May 1, 2010 at 7:22 am

    Whoa… Nice piece!^^

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    harini
    May 1, 2010 at 7:48 am

    ooo… wicked. Cool!

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    Lazy Pineapple
    May 1, 2010 at 8:00 am

    oooo sinister story…..loved it…
    Started off with a bang….quite powerful.

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    pal
    May 1, 2010 at 8:40 am

    Good one!! Though, I think you gave it away in the opening para with ‘Just the way she wanted’.

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    Sourav
    May 1, 2010 at 11:33 am

    Inhumane .. I still like it ! 😛

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    geeta232
    May 1, 2010 at 4:36 pm

    Hey ..liked your story…It was good
    All the best for BAT 10

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    Sureindran R.
    May 1, 2010 at 7:40 pm

    scary that was. dinner can be a dangerous thing. well, good post!

    Sureindran R. – Escape

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    The Fool
    May 2, 2010 at 4:52 am

    Excellent piece. I am not a great fan of 55 fiction and such short pieces. But I appreciate when I really see a good one where really a lot is conveyed in less words. You have done that. But one small thing I found. The lines

    “Her ticket to freedom. Her ticket to escape his clutches. ” – Isn’t this a repetition of idea. What value when your economizing words?

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    Mahesh Kalaal
    May 2, 2010 at 8:29 am

    hard, marvel, raw and impacting

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    Psych Babbler
    May 2, 2010 at 10:16 am

    Welcome Saurabh! Thanks for the lovely comment! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 2, 2010 at 10:16 am

    Hehe… =) Thanks…

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    Psych Babbler
    May 2, 2010 at 11:18 am

    =D Glad I made you laugh Nu!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 2, 2010 at 11:18 am

    You’re back?!! =) Thanks Mags!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 2, 2010 at 11:29 am

    =) Aww that’s nice…I will do my best to give this justice henceforth. I doubt I will stop given that it comes automatically but will try and put more thought into it…

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    Sid
    May 2, 2010 at 6:21 pm

    Hey that was cruel…and wicked and I liked it a hell ossum. Why can’t we all think that way..

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    Chatterbox
    May 2, 2010 at 10:11 pm

    Powerful post!!

    Brilliant take on the prompt 🙂

    Best wishes for BAT 🙂

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    Shreya Sen
    May 3, 2010 at 5:44 am

    hey Psyche Babbler!I have been an age-old follower of your blog and your work is simply amazing! I simply have to ask you this,would you please consider making a submission to a baby e magazine ? You will find all details here.

    http://feministjungle.blogspot.com/2010/05/call-for-submissions.html

    The magazine is a celebration of art as a healing power. It dedicated to all those who have survived trauma of some kind.We would love to have a submission from you for our very first edition!

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    SaroSena
    May 3, 2010 at 5:48 am

    Ha ha ha ha Femme fatale 🙂 Lovely. And yes, all is perfect 🙂

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 8:47 am

    Thanks Nethra! =) Yes she was…

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 8:47 am

    Hehe…yes…there’s a lot out there 😉 Be warned… =P

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 8:47 am

    Welcome Leo! Thanks for the lovely comment…. =) Keep visiting…

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 8:48 am

    Welcome Sash! And thanks for the lovely comment… =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 8:48 am

    Hehe…thanks Harini!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:14 am

    Thanks LP! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:15 am

    Welcome Pal! Well, the ‘just the way she wanted’ I had hoped to have a meaning that the house was looking perfect….just as she wanted. It was one of those double meaning phrases… =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:15 am

    Welcome Sourav! Thanks! =) Who wants something sickly sweet, eh? =P

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:15 am

    Thanks Geeta! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:16 am

    Hehe! Thanks…yes, beware the evil woman… =P

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:42 am

    Welcome The Fool! Thanks for the lovely review. The reason for having two similar statements was actually to try and confuse the reader into thinking that the woman was being battered (hence ‘husband’s clutches’) but instead, the ‘freedom’ aspect was what the protagonist was actually looking for…hope that made sense…

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:43 am

    Thanks Mahesh! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:43 am

    I like cruel and wicked things…on paper that is! =) If we all thought that way fr real…hmm…we’d be a bunch of psychopaths?? =P

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:44 am

    Thanks CB and good luck to you too!

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:44 am

    Hehe… =) Thanks Sarosena…

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    Psych Babbler
    May 3, 2010 at 10:46 am

    Welcome Shreya and I’m honoured with your comments about my work. I am also honoured that you would want me to write for your mag…I will definitely make an effort to do so!

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    swayambhumukherjee
    May 3, 2010 at 2:47 pm

    hey awesome!!!

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    Avada Kedavra
    May 3, 2010 at 3:32 pm

    That was a good 55-er PB 🙂 I never knew the term “Battered-woman syndrome”. Thanks for the wiki link, it was useful. Loved it. Short one but really powerful.

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    Sourav
    May 4, 2010 at 10:39 am

    okay .. I found this sweet ! 😛

    in love with me and life..escape !

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    Psych Babbler
    May 5, 2010 at 12:31 am

    LOL! =D

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    Psych Babbler
    May 5, 2010 at 12:31 am

    Welcome Swayambhum! And thanks! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 5, 2010 at 12:32 am

    Thanks Avada! Battered-woman syndrome…I’ve read about it in crime novels and seen it on law shows. =) Thanks for the lovely comment…

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    Shilpa
    May 5, 2010 at 3:30 am

    Really very cruel 🙂
    All the best for BAT

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    Mehak
    May 5, 2010 at 8:43 am

    nice post and nice blog too! 🙂 all the best!

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    Tuppence
    May 7, 2010 at 4:00 pm

    Simple and neat
    Nice one, PB

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    Psych Babbler
    May 9, 2010 at 3:52 am

    Thanks Shilpa! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 9, 2010 at 3:52 am

    Welcome Mehak! Thanks for the lovely comment! Keep visiting… =)

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    Psych Babbler
    May 9, 2010 at 3:53 am

    Thanks Tuppence! =)

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