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Mother’s Love: 55 Fiction

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She showered all her love and attention on her newborn. She couldn’t understand her husband’s jealousy. Or his weird stares. Or sad face. But she didn’t care; her son needed her.

He finally couldn’t take it and showed her their son’s grave. He had been still born. 2 years ago.

Love can do strange things.

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43 Comments

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    Lazy Pineapple
    May 31, 2010 at 10:40 am

    eerie and tragic…
    Your story raised hair on the nape of my neck.
    All the best PB 🙂

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    Psych Babbler
    May 31, 2010 at 11:00 am

    Thanks LP! Glad it had that effect… 🙂

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    Dhiman
    May 31, 2010 at 1:00 pm

    true Love can do strange things :)… Gr8 one!!!
    All the Best !!!

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    The Fool
    May 31, 2010 at 2:20 pm

    Nice twist. Good attempt. But it was not as good as your post on Blog-a-ton ‘escape’.I feel you could have shown that the child was dead in a better way.

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    PNA
    May 31, 2010 at 3:12 pm

    Yes, it had that effect on me too…. hairs standing up….
    but I don’t like sad endings 🙁
    But I love ur post… 🙂
    Keep at it PB… that was some writing
    Raiders on a roll :):)
    Hurray!

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    pal
    May 31, 2010 at 3:39 pm

    OMG. That was hard-hitting. One of the best 55-ers I’ve read.

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    Rumya
    May 31, 2010 at 4:14 pm

    I’m dumbfounded!! No words to express….

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    phoenixritu
    May 31, 2010 at 5:30 pm

    Disturbing!! But it really lingers ….

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    Neha
    May 31, 2010 at 6:36 pm

    this is so damn sad! it is difficult to get over such a tragedy and trauma!

    good luck for the contest..

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    Titaxy
    May 31, 2010 at 10:50 pm

    ouch…

    Loved it!

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    Saurabh Panshikar
    June 1, 2010 at 2:32 am

    Ow that was sad… A case of love driving people crazy here…
    Well written in 55 words…

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    stargazerpuj
    June 1, 2010 at 11:23 am

    Goosebumps…

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    Psych Babbler
    June 1, 2010 at 11:40 am

    Thanks Dhiman! =)

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    Avada Kedavra
    June 1, 2010 at 2:41 pm

    Raiders are so awesome 🙂 Great post PB 😀

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    Bikram
    June 1, 2010 at 3:43 pm

    hey all the best and this is a nice 55er… sad story but as you say love has weird ways …

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    tavish(sensible-bakwas.com)
    June 1, 2010 at 7:35 pm

    took my tiny brain a while to get that… i misunderstood it at first and I was like what has she written? But when I did, all i could say is wow! I would have written a huge story to get that scene out and u got it in a fiction 55? Wow again!

    Cheers!
    Taviish

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    Nethra
    June 3, 2010 at 8:18 am

    Mother’s love. That was something. Nice! 🙂

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    Gyanban
    June 3, 2010 at 4:56 pm

    nice one, got the impact.
    cheers
    GB

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:26 pm

    Thanks…but in 55 words, still born was the best option 🙂

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:27 pm

    Hehe Pinny…I’m a morbid person! I do like sad endings compared to happily ever after predictable endings… =D Thanks!

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:28 pm

    Wow Pal! Thanks heaps for that comment…means a lot… =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:28 pm

    Thanks Rumya =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:28 pm

    Yeah, pretty morbid, isn’t it? I’ll take the lingering as a compliment =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:29 pm

    And Welcome to my blog Ritu…

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:29 pm

    Thanks Neha…good luck to you too!

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:29 pm

    Hehe…thanks T! You are like me with the sad endings! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:32 pm

    Thanks Saurabh 🙂

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:33 pm

    Welcome Puj! And I’m glad it had the goosebump feel to it…it means it delivered the message all right! 🙂

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:33 pm

    Yay Avada! Thanks! Go Raiders…

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:34 pm

    Welcome Bikram! Thanks =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:34 pm

    Lol Tavish…and thanks for the lovely comment…means a lot! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:34 pm

    Thanks Nethra! =)

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    Psych Babbler
    June 3, 2010 at 11:34 pm

    Thanks GB!

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    Titaxy
    June 3, 2010 at 11:57 pm

    ohhhh I love the header so much 😀 v v nice!

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    Psych Babbler
    June 4, 2010 at 12:37 am

    Thanks T! Another of my sister’s creations…I’m still a bit partial to the previous one but like this one too =)

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    The Fool
    June 4, 2010 at 12:38 am

    I meant – ‘showed her the son’s grave’ – i felt that somehow it did not logically fit and could have been slightly tweaked to give a better effect. She is obviously gone crazy because she knows her son is dead but had begun to believe he is alive. So what will showing her the grave accomplish?

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    phoenixritu
    June 4, 2010 at 5:11 am

    Been reading your posts for a long time – delurked now

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    Psych Babbler
    June 4, 2010 at 9:54 am

    Given that the son was still born, she has been depressed and deluded since…the showing of the grave is meant to represent a reality check…a step towards getting her to accept what has happened.

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    Psych Babbler
    June 4, 2010 at 10:54 am

    Ah…well, I’m really glad you de-lurked! =)

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    mahmud faisal
    June 6, 2010 at 9:22 am

    You have expressed deepest feelings in just 55 !!
    so nice creation…

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    Psych Babbler
    June 6, 2010 at 10:37 am

    Thanks Mahmud!

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    Reema
    July 11, 2010 at 6:23 am

    so sad 🙁

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    Psych Babbler
    July 11, 2010 at 8:12 am

    Thanks…it obviously did it’s job…

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