Flash Fiction

Betrayal

She looked at the face she’d seen every day for six years staring down at her. She felt his warm breath against her cheek quicken as he leant closer. Her body stiffened, as his hand reached under her pyjamas.

She closed her eyes, holding on tighter to her teddy bear.

(c) Sanch V @ Sanch Writes (7 June 2017)

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12 Comments

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    Anusha
    June 7, 2017 at 11:19 pm

    Unexpected take on the prompt. Disturbing too.

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    Sara
    June 8, 2017 at 3:56 am

    Oh, this is painful but happens for real… wish I could pull out the hand.

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    Patricia
    June 8, 2017 at 5:52 am

    Powerful, but so horrendous it sticks with you. Well done with the prompt!

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    Danielle
    June 8, 2017 at 11:18 am

    Very powerful, Sanch! I like how I didn’t know until the very end that the protagonist was a child. Then the gravity of it really shook me.

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    Sreesha
    June 8, 2017 at 12:51 pm

    Oh that was like a punch in the gut. Wish I could do something to help the girl.
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    Kalpana solsi
    June 8, 2017 at 2:46 pm

    Child abuse goes unnoticed and wrecks the young bud. The cruel hand has to be punished.

    A different take on the prompt.
    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/06/hand.html?m=1

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    Rachna
    June 8, 2017 at 2:50 pm

    This was so sad. It went from beautiful to sick in a few words.

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    Lata Sunil
    June 8, 2017 at 3:42 pm

    You captured the tension so well in few lines. Hope the girl gave it back good.

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    Beat About the Book
    June 8, 2017 at 4:17 pm

    This really hit hard. How very terrible for the little child.
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    Eli
    June 8, 2017 at 10:31 pm

    Ohhhhh yeeeek… Made me feel sad and mad… superwell written though…
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    Varad
    June 9, 2017 at 12:12 am

    Ok. This was super disturbing. Makes me want to use my hand to thrash that creep. A well written story. Cheers

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    Parul
    June 15, 2017 at 2:49 am

    Oh that was sad and hit hard. 🙁
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